In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that this is good for a country., while others believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount people can earn. Discuss both views and giye your opinion.

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There is no denying the fact that no one can live without money and everyone works hard to get it.

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it is a commonly held belief that a few people enter extremely high

salaries

and, it is good for a country . There is

also

an argument that others believe that the

government

should control

salaries

and limit the amount people can earn.

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of view and express my opinion. On

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salary.

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, if a few people are given big

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, they worked hard to get it and they

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the employee has a big family.

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benefit the

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can increase the

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income .

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salaries

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income and to be prepared

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justice to give the

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not more not less.

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coherence cohesion

Ensure the introduction clearly presents the two different viewpoints without ambiguity.

task achievement

Work on the clarity and grammatical accuracy of your sentences. For example, "enter extremely high salaries" should be "earn extremely high salaries."

task achievement

Use specific and relevant examples to support your points more effectively.

coherence cohesion

Strengthen your transitions between ideas to improve the overall flow of the essay.

task achievement

The essay discusses both viewpoints as required by the task.

coherence cohesion

You have included a conclusion that summarizes your viewpoint.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

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for example
for instance
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to give a clear example
such as
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3Word repetition
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27Grammar mistakes
 

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Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Task Achievement: 5.0

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Clear & comprehensive ideas

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In some countries, a few people earn extremely high salaries. Some people think that this is good for a country., while others believe that the government should control salaries and limit the amount people can earn. Discuss both views and giye your opinion.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

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