The pie chart below show the online shopping sales for retail sectors in New Zealand in 2003 and 2013.

The pie chart shows the online

sales

retail sectors in New Zealand between 2003 and 2013.

Overall

the chart compares four parts, namely clothes, travel, books and film and music. Travel was so higher percentage than other tips in 2003 but the film and music sectors were visited in 2013. The major online

sales

in the year 2003 were travel sector-related products and services accounting pp for 36% . But in 2013 , it dropped to 29% and total online

sales

in 2003. The second ruling sector was clothes with 24%

overall

sales

. But that was dropped and reached to 16%

overall

. Film and music engaged 21% of the

overall

sales

in 2003,

while

it increased to 33% which attained the topmost position in 2013. In 2013 , the percentage of online

sales

for books was 22% .

However

, it was a little bit lower for ten years which accounted for 19% .

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