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You have recently started work in a new company. Write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter Explain why you changed job Describe your new job tell himlher your other news

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Dear friend, How are you ? I hope my letter finds you
will
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. I'm writing
this
 letter to inform you about the change of my job.
First,
you
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know
 that I was
worker
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a worker
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 in
advertising
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an advertising
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campany
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company
. After my graduation in PHD in marketing, I want to practice teaching
in
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an
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 university. Always, I love
become
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 a teacher. I
workded
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worked
 in the advertising
campany
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company
 until I finished my
PHD
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PhD
 courses.
Second,
now I have a
teacher
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 job
in
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northern border university
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. I'm very happy with
this
 job. Daily, I teach
a courses
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courses
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 in my speciality
such
 as marketing. I finished my work in 13
h
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hours in
afternoon
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the afternoon
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. It is interesting to contact many students and have
discussion
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 with them about important
subject
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 in marketing.
Also
, I contact
much
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 colleagues with
multiples
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 nationalities. I
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much
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 hours
in
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researching and preparing
academic
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the academic
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paper
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.
In
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 the final of
semester
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, I prepare various exams
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 my students.
Finally
, I want to tell you that
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 will take an important grade in the university. It is a marketing department director. It is an interesting work for me. Bests regards Rabeb
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coherence cohesion
Check for spelling and grammatical errors to improve clarity.
task achievement
Consider expanding on your job change reasons and your future aspirations to add depth to your letter.
task achievement
The letter provides a clear and complete response to the task, addressing all three points: why you changed your job, description of the new job, and other news.
coherence cohesion
The paragraphs are mostly well-organized, and each main idea is presented in a separate paragraph.
task achievement
The tone of the letter is friendly and suitable for writing to a friend.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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