TOPIC – Nowadays, more and more people are moving from the countryside to cities, which are becoming overcrowded. What are the reasons for this movement to cities and what can be done to reduce it?
Now, more and more
people
are moving from Use synonyms
a
Correct article usage
the
countryside
to Use synonyms
cities
. Use synonyms
As a result
, the Linking Words
cities
become overcrowded. In my opinion, there are several reasons why Use synonyms
this
can Linking Words
be happen
, Change the verb form
happen
such
as lack of Linking Words
access
to public transport. Use synonyms
Also
, I will elaborate Linking Words
the
solutions below.
Sometimes it is common to certain countries that have different development between the Change preposition
on the
countryside
and the Use synonyms
cities
. By that, Use synonyms
people
decide to move to places which can guarantee a better life. In their new places, they can Use synonyms
easier
get public Replace the word
easily
transportations
, Fix the agreement mistake
transportation
access
Use synonyms
to
educational institutions, Change preposition
apply
have
Correct word choice
and have
a
better Correct article usage
apply
job
. Fix the agreement mistake
jobs
For example
, Linking Words
people
who are running Use synonyms
business
online and living in Fix the agreement mistake
businesses
Use synonyms
countryside
have to pay high Add an article
the countryside
cost
to distribute their products. But, when they are moving to Fix the agreement mistake
costs
cities
, the cost will Use synonyms
lower
. Not only that, but Add a missing verb
be lower
also
the way they reach their customers will more Linking Words
easy
because they live in Replace the word
easier
cities
.
Another reasons are the choices to have a good career in Use synonyms
Use synonyms
countryside
Add an article
the countryside
is
not many. Correct subject-verb agreement
are
People
have Use synonyms
a
Remove the article
apply
limit
Replace the word
limited
access
to get a job. Meanwhile, in Use synonyms
cities
, Use synonyms
people
can be anything they want to. Use synonyms
In addition
, the students can have a good quality of education by learning in Linking Words
cities
. Use synonyms
For instance
, Linking Words
for
those who learn in Change preposition
apply
Use synonyms
countryside
Correct article usage
the countryside
maybe
get hardships by Correct your spelling
may
did
not Verb problem
apply
get
a signal in their area. Wrong verb form
getting
However
, Linking Words
the
problem like Correct article usage
a
this
will not be found in Linking Words
cities
.
Overcrowded may be a problem and certainly there are solutions Use synonyms
of
it. Change preposition
to
First,
the role of the Linking Words
government
is important here. The Use synonyms
government
must have Use synonyms
like
Change preposition
apply
public
policy to manage it, Add an article
the public
a public
such
as Linking Words
relocate
the Wrong verb form
relocating
people
or Use synonyms
solve
the problems in Wrong verb form
solving
Use synonyms
countryside
. What I mean by Add an article
the countryside
this
is Linking Words
because
overcrowded Correct word choice
that
is
causes Unnecessary verb
apply
of
more and more Change preposition
apply
people
Use synonyms
come
to Fix the infinitive
to come
cities
, so there Use synonyms
is
must problems in the Correct subject-verb agreement
are
countryside
. The Use synonyms
government
can try to enhance public facilities, give Use synonyms
access
to electricity and sanitation to anyone, and build public schools as many as possible.
Use synonyms
To sum up
, the problems like education, public Linking Words
transportations
, occupations, etc are the main reasons why Fix the agreement mistake
transportation
cities
are overcrowded. SoUse synonyms
as to
, the Change preposition
apply
government
as the stakeholders must tackle these struggles by making Use synonyms
policy
.Fix the agreement mistake
policies
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