TOPIC – Nowadays, more and more people are moving from the countryside to cities, which are becoming overcrowded. What are the reasons for this movement to cities and what can be done to reduce it?

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Now, more and more
people
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are moving from
a
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the
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countryside
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to
cities
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.
As a result
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, the
cities
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become overcrowded. In my opinion, there are several reasons why
this
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can
be happen
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happen
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,
such
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as lack of
access
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to public transport.
Also
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, I will elaborate
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on the
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solutions below. Sometimes it is common to certain countries that have different development between the
countryside
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and the
cities
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. By that,
people
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decide to move to places which can guarantee a better life. In their new places, they can
easier
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easily
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get public
transportations
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transportation
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,
access
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to
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apply
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educational institutions,
have
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and have
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a
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apply
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better
job
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jobs
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.
For example
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,
people
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who are running
business
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businesses
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online and living in
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countryside
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the countryside
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have to pay high
cost
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costs
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to distribute their products. But, when they are moving to
cities
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, the cost will
lower
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be lower
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. Not only that, but
also
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the way they reach their customers will more
easy
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because they live in
cities
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. Another reasons are the choices to have a good career in
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countryside
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the countryside
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is
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are
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not many.
People
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have
a
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apply
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limit
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limited
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access
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to get a job. Meanwhile, in
cities
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,
people
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can be anything they want to.
In addition
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, the students can have a good quality of education by learning in
cities
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.
For instance
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,
for
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apply
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those who learn in
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countryside
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the countryside
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maybe
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may
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get hardships by
did
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apply
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not
get
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getting
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a signal in their area.
However
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,
the
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a
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problem like
this
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will not be found in
cities
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. Overcrowded may be a problem and certainly there are solutions
of
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to
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it.
First,
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the role of the
government
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is important here. The
government
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must have
like
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apply
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public
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the public
a public
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policy to manage it,
such
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as
relocate
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relocating
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the
people
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or
solve
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solving
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the problems in
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countryside
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the countryside
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. What I mean by
this
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is
because
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that
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overcrowded
is
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apply
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causes
of
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apply
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more and more
people
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come
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to come
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to
cities
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, so there
is
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are
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must problems in the
countryside
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. The
government
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can try to enhance public facilities, give
access
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to electricity and sanitation to anyone, and build public schools as many as possible.
To sum up
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, the problems like education, public
transportations
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transportation
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, occupations, etc are the main reasons why
cities
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are overcrowded. So
as to
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apply
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, the
government
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as the stakeholders must tackle these struggles by making
policy
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policies
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.
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