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Because of modern technology, some people believe that it is no longer necessary for people to learn handwriting skills, but others believe that handwriting is still an important skill. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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There is a common belief
such
 as thanks to the recent
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advances
 of modern technologies there is no need to
learning
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 handwriting
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, but some people ,including me , believe that
this
 skill
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still have its nessecity . On the one hand, today typing become more
convinient
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convenient
to
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 any kind of activity that involves
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 one's thoughts.
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 all people who
uses
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internet
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 for communication or searching
information
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 have to type on the keyboard of
the
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 computer or phone.
Futhermore
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Furthermore
, all academic studies and reports
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 by typing.Since typed
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easy
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are easy
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 to
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understand
 most important documents ,
law
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 and court sentences
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 been written by typing.
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 it can be
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difficult
 to
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understand
 one's
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handwriting
 style and it can lead to misunderstanding.
On the other hand
,
handwritting
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handwriting
 is not
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 activity as it has additional benefits to individuals.
Handwritting
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Handwriting
 is
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 important part of the teaching process.
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spelling
There are a few spelling errors throughout the essay, such as 'advancemend', 'nessecity', 'diffucult', 'understant', and 'handwritting'. Reviewing spelling and using tools like spell-check could help reduce these errors.
structure
The essay would benefit from more clearly structured paragraphs. Dividing the arguments into clear paragraphs with topic sentences can improve readability and coherence.
examples
While the essay presents both sides of the argument, it would benefit from more specific examples and evidence to support the points made. Including examples helps to strengthen the argument.
conclusion
A concluding paragraph summarizing the main points and providing a final opinion would make the essay feel more complete. Right now, the essay feels unfinished due to the abrupt ending.
addressing task
The essay addresses both views on the topic, which is good for task achievement.
clear opinion
The writer provides a clear opinion, which is a key requirement of the task.
elaboration
The essay attempts to elaborate on the points, providing some reasoning for each view.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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