Some universities students want to learn about other subjects in addition to their main subjects. Others believe it is more important to give all their time and attention to studying for a qualification. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Few students are focusing more on
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a alternative courses
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over their main subject.
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few argue that allocating all their time
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a main subjects
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is more important for their qualification.
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with the former statement because additional subjects like music and painting, can
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jobs
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opportunities if they fail in
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subjects and
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as
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time.
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coherence cohesion
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Provide a clear and concise thesis statement in the introduction to outline your stance on the topic.
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Develop each of your main points with specific examples and explanations to strengthen your argument.
coherence cohesion
Use paragraphs to separate different ideas and ensure each paragraph has a clear main point that supports your argument.
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The essay addresses the prompt and attempts to discuss both views in the context of the topic.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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