some people prefer to live in a house, while others fel that there are more advantages to living in an appartment. Are there more advantages than disadvantages of living in a house compared with living in an apartment?

In different countries in the world, it
have
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two
formes
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forms
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of local for the
people
.
First
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The first
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forme
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form
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is the
house
. The second
forme
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form
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is an
appartment
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apartment
. some
people
prefer to live in a
house
,
while
others
fel
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feel
felt
that there are more advantages to living in an
appartment
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apartment
. In
this
context, to live in a
house
present
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presents
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some advantages.
First,
the
structure
of the
house
is more
confortable
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comfortable
than an
appartment
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apartment
. In fact, the
nombre
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number
of
room
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rooms
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in a
house
is
more
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apply
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higher than
an
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in an
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appartement
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apartment
. The big
appartment
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apartment
compose
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is composed
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for
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of
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3 rooms. But in a big
house
, the number of rooms is more than 4.
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Also
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, in a
house
, it is basically the garden
exist
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exists
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.
However
, in an
appartment
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apartment
, it is impossible to have a garden.
Secondly
, in a
house
, we have the possibility to change the
structure
. In an
appartment
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apartment
, it is impossible to change the
structure
because
they
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there
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exist
others
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other
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appartement
in the same local.
Fiancially
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Financially
Finally
, the cost of
this
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these
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changes is
more
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apply
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higher for an
appartement
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apartment
compared
in
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to
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a
house
.
In
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On
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other
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the other
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hand, some
people
built
there
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their
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house
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houses
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with a personal and specific
structure
and they are the proprieties of these houses. But an
appartement
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apartment
is built by some investor with regular and identical
structure
.
People
don't have a choice about the
structure
and it is difficult to pay the buying price for an
appartement
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apartment
. The majority of
people
how
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who
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live in
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an appartement
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appartement paie
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apartment pay
a
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apply
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rent for the
propriety
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property
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of
this
local. 
Finally
, the
relation
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relationship
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between
people
living in a
house
is more important than an
appartment
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apartment
.
Such
, we
live
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have lived
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in an
appartement
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apartment
for years and we don't know each other
personne
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personally
. In a
house
, we see our neighbours and we have social
relation
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relations
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with them.  In sum, living in a
house
present
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presents
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more advantages than an
appartment
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apartment
. Specially , the noise in a
house
is less than an
appartement
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apartment
.
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