Some educationalist think that international exchange visits will benefit teenagers at school to extend. Do you do that advantages outweigh disadvantages?

One school of thought is that young
students
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gain from foreign student
exchange
program
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programs
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there is no doubt that these programs can
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students
with
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language
skills
and more employment opportunities have to go through emotional distress and
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,
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, pros, and cons in
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paragraph On the one hand,
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effect on
student
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students
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is that they feel
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.
In other words
, when
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away from their
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feel and left alone because they do not have any friends, siblings or
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parents to talk with to which they come under the burden of emotional distress.
Moreover
, foreign
students
, pay exorbitant tuition fees for international student
exchange
programs.
Hence
, they tend to do jobs to support themselves financially because they are in a foreign country doing everything by themselves, studying cooking and working they overwork themselves.
Also
, without any emotional support sometimes they take suicidal
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.
For instance
,
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study has shown that in
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two
years
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years,
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more than 37 international
students
have died because of
financially
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a financially
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unstable situation.
On the other hand
, there are numerous advantages of
this
trend. The most prominent is enhanced communication
skills
. When learners come to study overseas they
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English speaking in real life situations.
Also
, they meet people from different cultures, which
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them
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the opportunity
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cultural
exchange
. It
also
enables diversity and integrity, which results in
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of
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racism.
In addition
to it, it
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students
more employable. It makes
students
stand out from the crowd because they have cultural awareness,
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and transversal
skills
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example, a survey has shown that internationally
exchange
students
have 42
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more employment opportunities.
To conclude
,
although
there are significant drawbacks of international
exchange
visits, the benefits like enhanced language
skills
, cultural
exchange
, and increased employment chances are indispensable.
Hence
, in my viewpoint, the advantages of
this
trend outweigh
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to a greater extent.
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