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The charts below show the percantage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

The charts below show the percantage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.
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The
pie
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chart
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 illustrates
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the percentange
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percentange
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percentage
percentages
 of different
water
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consumption
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 in six
area
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areas
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 of the world. Every
pie
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chart
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are
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separeted
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separated
 by author: Industrial
use
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, agricultural
use
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 and domestic
use
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.
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, in Africa, Central
Asia
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and
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apply
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South
Asia
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, and South
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America's
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America
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consumption
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 of
water
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contribute
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 mostly
for
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 agricultural activities.
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,
according to
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 the
chart
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 North
America
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 (48%) and
Europe's
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Europe
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 (53%)
use
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the
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apply
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water
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 for industrial activities more than
other
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the other
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 four areas. In Central
Asia
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, there is a significant
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percantage
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percentage
 of
consumption
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 of
water
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. Agricultural
use
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contribute
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contributes
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 %88
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percantage
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percentage
 in Central
Asia
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's
pie
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chart
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. The high
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percantage
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percentage
 is followed by Africa (84%) and
then
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 followed by South East
Asia
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 (%81). And other
consumption
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 of
water
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contribute
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 very small
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percantage
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percentage
 in
this
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pie
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chart
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. Domestic
use
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contribute
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 19%
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percantage
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per cent
 in South
America
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 and
this
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percantage
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percentage
 is the
most highly
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 amount compared to
other
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the other
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 five areas. In Eurepo,
folk's
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folks
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use
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the
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apply
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water
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 15% and
North
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in North
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America
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this
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percantage
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percentage
 is %13
as
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similar to Eurepo.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words pie, chart, water, consumption, use, asia, america, percantage with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 5 times.
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