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The charts below show the percantage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.

The charts below show the percantage of water used for different purposes in six areas of the world.
#show #percantage #water #purposes #six #areas #world
The
pie
chart
 illustrates
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the percentange
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percentange
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percentage
percentages
 of different
water
consumption
 in six
area
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areas
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 of the world. Every
pie
chart
are
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is
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separeted
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separated
 by author: Industrial
use
, agricultural
use
 and domestic
use
.
Overall
, in Africa, Central
Asia
and
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apply
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South
Asia
, and South
America's
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America
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consumption
 of
water
contribute
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contributes
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 mostly
for
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to
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 agricultural activities.
On the other hand
,
according to
 the
chart
 North
America
 (48%) and
Europe's
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Europe
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 (53%)
use
the
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apply
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water
 for industrial activities more than
other
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the other
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 four areas. In Central
Asia
, there is a significant
percantage
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percentage
 of
consumption
 of
water
. Agricultural
use
contribute
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contributes
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 %88
percantage
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percentage
 in Central
Asia
's
pie
chart
. The high
percantage
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percentage
 is followed by Africa (84%) and
then
 followed by South East
Asia
 (%81). And other
consumption
 of
water
contribute
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contributes
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 very small
percantage
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percentage
 in
this
pie
chart
. Domestic
use
contribute
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contributes
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 19%
percantage
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per cent
 in South
America
 and
this
percantage
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percentage
 is the
most highly
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highest
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 amount compared to
other
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the other
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 five areas. In Eurepo,
folk's
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folks
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use
the
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apply
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water
 15% and
North
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in North
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America
this
percantage
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percentage
 is %13
as
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apply
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similar to Eurepo.
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