The bar chart below shows the number of employed persons by job type and sex for Australia last year Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart below shows the number of employed persons by job type and sex for Australia last year

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The figure illustrates the amount of
males
and
females
employed in different
sectors
in the past year in Australia.
Overall
,
it is clear that
males
were involved the most in all types of jobs
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exception of professionals and clerical having more
females
. It is immediately noticeable, that there was a significant gap between men and women in most of the
sectors
. Tradespeople had the largest amount, with 900,000
males
.
This
was compared to the amount of
females
with only 100,000. Production and managers followed a similar trend to that of tradespeople, with more men than women. As for labourers and semi-professionals, those two
sectors
had a slight difference where both
males
and
females
worked. It is
also
important to note that, clerical and professionals had a minimal gap between the sexes involved in
such
a job, but the majority were
females
for those two
sectors
specifically standing at almost 999,000 and 700,000 respectively.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words males, females, sectors with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Employment figures
  • Sectors
  • Significant disparities
  • Gender balance
  • Skewed
  • Trends
  • Patterns
  • Dominant
  • Inferred
  • Labor market
  • Year-on-year comparison
  • Insights
  • Implications
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