Some people believe that bicycles are the best mode of transport in the cities while others disagree. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of both views and give your opinion.
No one can deny that a person who rides a bicycle can help in many ways ,
not to mention
, the public, environment
and oneself. Correct article usage
the environment
However
, there are some arguments regarding the statement about whether bicycles are the best option of
transportation in the cities. From my perspective, I believe that its have both merits and demerits Change preposition
for
which
I am more inclined toward its advantages.
Correct word choice
but
To begin
with, there are many positive outcomes when it comes to riding a bicycle. First of all, it is
significant effects Verb problem
has
to
a person's health and mind that allow Change preposition
on
ones
to improve Fix the agreement mistake
one
overall
fitness. Nevertheless
, this
activity offers an individual cardiovascular exercise that can reduce heart disease and medical costs. Next,
in the urban areas , people are concern
about Wrong verb form
concerned
traffic
congestion that
might be an issue to the Correct pronoun usage
which
explaination
Correct your spelling
explanation
of
being late to the Change preposition
for
work places
. Correct your spelling
workplaces
Therefore
, if the communities encourage themselves to ride a bicycle then
that will not be a problem because of traffic
reduction. Similarly
, traffic
reduction resulting
in Replace the word
results
greener
environment Correct article usage
a greener
whereas
the biscyles
produce zero Correct your spelling
bicycles
bicycle
emmissions
and help Correct your spelling
emissions
reducing
air pollution.
Wrong verb form
reduce
On the other hand
, safety concern
Fix the agreement mistake
concerns
is
one of the downsides of Correct subject-verb agreement
are
this
event that could lead to accidents , particularly in the cities because of the heavy traffic
and insufficient bike lanes. Additionally
, a bad weather condition also
contributes to such
misforture
namely rain and snow. Correct your spelling
misfortune
misfortunes
However
, with a safe guideline and good infrastructures
, Fix the agreement mistake
infrastructure
this
tragedy can be prevented.
In conclusion, consider its
have both pros and cons but I believe that the upsides are more considerable because Change the pronoun
it
this
enhance
a person's health and Change the verb form
enhances
Add a missing verb
is environmental
environmental
friendly.Change the adjective
environmentally
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