Te chars below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount oof time spent doing housework in househlo in one country between 1920 and 2019. summarise the information by selecting the relevant and main features and make comparisons where relevat.

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doing housework in a week, in a particular country between 1920 and 2019.

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have increased drastically. On closer examination, we find that in 1920 almost none of the houses owned a fridge.

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

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Te chars below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount oof time spent doing housework in househlo in one country between 1920 and 2019. summarise the information by selecting the relevant and main features and make comparisons where relevat.

Fully explain your ideas

Some people think an international car-free day is an effective way to reduce air pollution. Others think there are more effective ways to do this. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.