The graph below shows the average number of UK commuters travelling each day by car, bus or train between 1970 and 2030.

The graph below shows the average number of UK

commuters travelling each day by car, bus or train between

1970 and 2030.
The line graph below
compare
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the amount of
degree
who
travels
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travel
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by
car
,
bus
or train in
United
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the United
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Kingdom from 1970 to 2030.
Overall
, during
this
sixty-year period, travel by
car
remained the biggest index during 60 years. In the
1970
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1970s
who
drive
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a
bus
was in the middle of the diagram with ear to the 4
degree
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degrees
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,
as well as
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become
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slowly decreasing from 4 to 3 points. As can be seen from the graph,
small
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a small
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amount of people who
are travels
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travel
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by train showed the lowest indicator with 2
degree
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degrees
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, and
till to
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the
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2030 started increasing to 5
degree
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degrees
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.
However
, by 2015 the number of people
travel
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travelling
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by
bus
become
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became
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less. The gap in travelling by
this
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these
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three transport
had
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widened and considerably more money was spent
for
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the
car
and
train
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trains
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than travelling by
bus
. The period between 1970 and 2030 saw
a
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sharp growth and in
the
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apply
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2030 people will spend more money to drive a
car
with 9
degree
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degrees
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as much as they did in 1970.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words degree, car, bus with synonyms.
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