Somepeopleprefertolivewitharoommate.Othersprefer to live alone. Compare the advantages of each choice. Which of these two options do you prefer? Use specific reasons to support your answer

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friend
that depends on
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the economical
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economical
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economic
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situtaion
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situation
and people's notions. I strongly prefer to live alone and
this
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to
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their advantages and disadvantages.
Firstly
,many people must live with
roommate
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a roommate
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beacuse
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because
today they do not have
an
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enough ıncome
for
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to
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live alone and
the
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tenement's
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tenement
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hiring
pays
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quite expensive nowadays.
Besides
the people who are under students in university , they have to
complate
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complete
their education
as well as
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to provide wages to
theirselfs
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their selfs
themself
.
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live
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living
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with
roommate
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a roommate
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leads to some problems.
For
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during the
sleeping
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the
roommate
can make a noise or talk
aloudly
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loudly
.
Moreover
that the situation causes violet of
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personnel
personal
belongsis
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belongs
. I
harsly
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hardly
harshly
hate that live with. someone.
Secondly
, I doubtless prefer to live sorely
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because
I can have
a
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freedom in my flat,
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furthermore
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I can do
it
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what
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how
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I want to do it . As I mentioned before live alone most likely regarding
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sufficent
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sufficient
salaries. If we have enough circumstances after that we can prefer to live freely. We can study without being distracted and we do not have to constantly clean up our houses.
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In addition
it has numerous advantages in terms of mental health and frame of mind.
To conclude
, From my point of view
live
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living
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with
roommate
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a roommate
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lots
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has lots
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of disadvantages rather
than
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to
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other
option
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options
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. Without any hesitation I strongly believe that
live
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merely provides
much
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many
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more
advatanges
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advantages
.
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grammar
Improve the grammatical accuracy to enhance readability (e.g., 'Live merely or with a fridens that depends on economical situtaion' should be 'Living alone or with friends depends on the economic situation').
cohesion
Use transitional words and phrases more effectively to improve the flow between paragraphs (e.g., in addition, therefore, furthermore).
example
Expand on specific examples to support your points more thoroughly (e.g., specify how living alone impacts mental health positively).
task achievement
The essay provides a clear preference and reasoning for living alone.
coherence
A conclusion is present, summarizing the main points effectively.
coherence
There is a logical structure in presenting the advantages and disadvantages of each choice.

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