The pie charts show the spending habits of citizens in UK in 1971 and 2001. Write a report to a university lecturer describing the data.

The pie charts show the spending habits of citizens in UK in 1971 and 2001. Write a report to a university lecturer describing the data.
The pie charts above illustrate the expenditure habits of
people
in the UK between 1971 and 2001. There are various habits,
such
as for
foods
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food
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, cars, books, computers,
furnitures
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furniture
types of furniture
pieces of furniture
items of furniture
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, restaurants,
petrol
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and petrol
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.
Overall
, the citizen
having
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have
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shifted how they
spending
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spend
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their
money
in two different years. In 2001, the UK's
people
most expend their budget on cars with nearly 45 per
cent
. Meanwhile, in 1971,
the
Correct article usage
apply
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people
more
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were more
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considerate
to
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of
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spending
the
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apply
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money
on
foods
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food
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.
Besides
that, in 2001, the spending
of
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on
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foods
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food
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and restaurants
is
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was
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in
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at
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the same per
cent
, which is 14 per
cent
.
However
, in 1971,
people
tend
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tended
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to use the
money
on cars with
total
Correct article usage
a total
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22
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of 22
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per
cent
.
Besides
, in 2001, 12 per
cent
from
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of
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their
money
was used for computers. On the one hand, in 2001, the percentage which
below
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was below
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10 per
cent
was for
furnitures
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furniture
types of furniture
pieces of furniture
items of furniture
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, books, and petrol. Respectively, 8 per
cent
, 1 per
cent
, and 8 per
cent
.
On the other hand
, in 1971, the expenditures which same as or under 10 per
cent
are
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were
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petrol, restaurants,
furnitures
Change the wording
furniture
types of furniture
pieces of furniture
items of furniture
show examples
, computers, and books.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, money, cent with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.

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