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The table and pie charts below show the number of research students in Australian universities in 2001 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and pie charts below show the number of research students in Australian universities in 2001 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given diagrams compare data about researcher
students
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 of various genders and nationalities in Australian universities at 2 points in time namely, 2001 and 2010.
Overall
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, it was important that the number of research
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 and the percentage of international women increased over the period of 9 years.
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, at both times the figure for local was more than for international researchers.
According to
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 the table, in the beginning,
students
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, who researched at Australian universities, were 33,657 local and 5,192 international.
Then
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 their score rose to 39,488 for local and 14,593 for international
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. The pie charts demonstrate that in 2001, the fraction of International research
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 constituted 13% 9 for males and 4% for women;
thereafter
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, their portion climbed to 18% for females and 12% for males in 2010.
In contrast
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, the proportion of local research
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 reduced from 87% in 2001 to 73% in 2010.
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, in 2001, both local sexes made up roughly the same fraction as just under 45% and after that, they decreased to 30% and 26% for women and men in 2010.

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