More and more people today wear fashionable clothes is it positive or negative development ? Are there more advantages or disadvantages to this trend?

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It is true that many customers are attracted towards trendy
clothes
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and they are very selective towards fashion industries
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thing has more negative outcomes than
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positive ,
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essay shall discuss more supporting reasons in forth-coming paragraphs.
To begin
with some merits of wearing trendy
clothes
. First and foremost it shows equality among
people
because Globalisation has
huge
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impact on everyone and similarities can be seen everywhere .
For
example
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nowadays jeans
is
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very
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a very
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common choice of
clothes
it can be seen in any corner of the world
thus
, one can easily find
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it
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any clothing store at the lowest price and
it
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they
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can
be afford
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by
middle
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the middle
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and poor class as well.
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trendy cloth can be considered
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positive
developments
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development
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. Apart from that, when
people
wear what they like
its
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help
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them to boost their confidence and same time he/she can
shows
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their personality .
On the other
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it has many
draw backs
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we can not neglect it. Following new fashion
trend
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trends
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has huge environmental impacts, as it
create
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greater
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amount of waste when
people
try to follow
latest
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trend they throw out their old
clothes
or else they choose not to wear
as
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they are too old so they would dislike
to wear
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old garments
hence
these old items become useless
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them so it create
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a same
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waste problem like plastic.
Furthermore
,
people
spend huge
amount
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of money
behind
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such
fashionable things .It upset
budget
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of
middle class
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family
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families
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like
Zara
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the Zara
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clothing brand
it
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is
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too costly
not
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and not
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afford
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by
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everyone when they launch new items everyone wants to buy
it
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them
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but it can not possible for them. It might be possible it will create
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a gap
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between rich and poor. In
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to another impact on climate
as
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amount
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of resources
use
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by manufacturing industries is too high
it
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also
they are using
chemical
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to
dyeing
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clothes
which are very toxic
for
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soil and water if they
dump
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in
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river
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,
hence
it is harming our natural resources
on
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earth. In conclusion , after discussing both sides
it is clear that
wearing trendy
thing
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is good but one must
should
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pay attention
while
doing
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shopping.
People
should
more
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be more
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aware
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of
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their actual choice so they can use it longer time so they do not create waste
to
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the environment.
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