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The map presents the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. k

The map presents the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words. k
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The given two maps illustrate the changes and development of the
village
 of
Ryemouth
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Tynemouth
 over the period of 1995 to
current
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the current
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 time
that is
 located
in
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on
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 the sea coastline. The
village
 of
Ryemouth
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Tynemouth
 had a huge development over the period of time. It has transformed from a small
village
 to a developed better one. The development of housing, new roads, and modern
building
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buildings
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 came into existence in the fishing industry which
is
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disappeared at
this
 time. In
the
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apply
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Ryemouth
village
, one thing that hasn't changed in the years
was
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is
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 the cafe which is situated on a main
streets
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street
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 corner. But, if you see the shop and fish market along the street located in the south of the area didn't exist right now. Those shops were replaced by new
restaurant
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restaurants
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 and some apartments respectively. At the moment,
the
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in the
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 north-east of the
village
 there
were
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was
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 a farmland and forest located where there
were
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was
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golfing
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a golfing
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 pitch and tennis court
situated
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apply
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. Another notable thing
that
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is that
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nearby
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the nearby
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 area of
hotel
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the hotel
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 was expanded with car parking.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words village with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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