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MamadjonovSamandar: The graph below shows four countries of residence of overseas students in Australia. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make make comparisons where relevant

MamadjonovSamandar: The graph below shows four countries of residence of overseas students in Australia. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make make comparisons where relevant
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The line graph depicts the
number
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 of
students
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 from four Asian countries—Indonesia, Hong Kong, Singapore, and
Malaysia
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 enrolled in Australian universities from 1982 to 2000.
Overall
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, Indonesia, Hong Kong, and Singapore
initially
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 had a similar
number
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 of
students
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, but their figures diverged significantly over time. Meanwhile,
Malaysia
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 experienced a gradual decline despite having the highest
number
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 of
students
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 in the initial years. Indonesia started with fewer than 1,000
students
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 in 1982.
However
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, there was a dramatic rise beginning in 1994, reaching 10,000
students
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.
This
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 upward trend continued until 1998, peaking at nearly 20,000
students
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 by 2000.
In contrast
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, Hong Kong remained steady with fewer than 1,000
students
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 from 1982 to 1997.
This
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number
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 fluctuated significantly in the following years, eventually reaching 20,000
students
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 by 2000.
On the other hand
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, both Malaysian and Singaporean
students
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 numbered 19,000 in 2000, despite
Malaysia
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 starting as the top country for student enrollment in Australia.
Malaysia
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 saw a gradual decline over the years,
whereas
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 Singapore experienced fluctuations but ultimately reached the same
number
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 as
Malaysia
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 by the end of the period.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, students, malaysia with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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