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The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below gives information about the underground railway systems in six cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The given table demonstrates information
of
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on
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 underground
railway
 systems in
London
, Paris, Tokyo, Washington DC,
Kyoto
 and Los Angeles, containing
date
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the date
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 opened, kilometres of route and passengers per year.
According to
 the table, a large amount of people
takes
Correct subject-verb agreement
take
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underground
Correct article usage
the underground
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for
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to
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 travel in
London
, Paris and Tokyo,
corespondingly
Correct your spelling
correspondingly
 775, 1191 and 1927
millions
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million
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of
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apply
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people per year. What's more, the underground
railway
 systems of the three cities are much longer than
that
Correct determiner usage
those
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 of Washington DC,
Kyoto
 and Los Angeles, the longest one,
London
, is approximately 33 times longer than the shortest one,
Kyoto
.
In addition
, the
London
, Paris and Tokyo underground
railway
 has a much longer history.
On the other hand
,
althought
Correct your spelling
although
 the underground
railway
 systems in Washington DC,
Kyoto
 and Los Angeles are much more newer and modern, the length of the routes
are
Correct subject-verb agreement
is
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 much shorter,
they
Correct word choice
and they
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 only
contains
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contain
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 126, 11 and 28 kilometres of route.
Last
 but not least, only
small
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a small
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 amount of people
chose
Wrong verb form
choose
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 to go out
by
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apply
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underground, passengers per year are only 144, 45 and 50
millions
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million
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 in the three cities.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words railway, london, kyoto with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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