The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry. Summarie the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The diagram below shows the process by which bricks are manufactured for the building industry. 

Summarie the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The given diagram illustrates the manufacturing procedure of
bricks
.
Overall
, the linear and man-made process goes through 7 steps with 3 materials, which
starts
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with digging and ends with delivering. The process starts with
digging
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the digging
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of
clay
by
digger
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a digger
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, after which
clay
goes through
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an apparat
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apparat
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called
roller
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a roller
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to separate
clay
from unnecessary particles.
At
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the third stage, filtered
clay
mixes with sand and water. After mixing,
mixture
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the mixture
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cuts
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by
wire
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cutter or gets its figure in moulds.
Following
this
,
bricks
need to be
dry
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in
drying
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oven for 24-48 hours.
Next
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step is transforming raw
bricks
to
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kiln.
Firstly
on
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this
phase, raw
bricks
need to be under moderate temperature, which is 200-980
degree
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degrees
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celsius
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, and under high temperature, which
is ranges
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from 870 to 1300
degree
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celsius
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. Phase ends with cooling, which goes in
cooling
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the cooling
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chamber from 24 to 48 hours. Right after that phase, ready
bricks
packages and
procedure
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the procedure
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ends with delivering
bricks
.
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