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MamadjonovSamandar: The graph below shows four countries of residence of overseas students in Australia. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make make comparisons where relevant

MamadjonovSamandar: The graph below shows four countries of residence of overseas students in Australia. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make make comparisons where relevant
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The line graph illustrates four
countries
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 of residence of overseas
students
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 in Australia. There are four
contries
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countries
 on the graph : Indonesia,
Hong
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Kong
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, Malaysia and Singapore.
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, the number of
students
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 who lived in those
countries
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 generally increased from 1982 to 2000 and the amount of people who stayed in
Hong
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Kong
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was fluctuated
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 during the given period. In 1982, no one lived in Indonesia,
Hong
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Kong
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 and Singapore. Only less than 10,000
students
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lived
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 in Malaysia. But as time went by, the amount of
students
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 who came to
Austraila
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Australia
 from those four
countries
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 gradually increased. In 1998,
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 of Indonesian
students
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 was around 25,000, the highest record in
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 chart. Even though, the number of
Indonesian
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Indonesians
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 dropped after 1998, at the end of the period, Indonesia was the top country among
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them. Singapore,
Hong
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Kong
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,
Malaysia
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and Malaysia
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 were followed next but, these three
countries
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'
figure
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 were similar,
recorded
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 approximately 20,000 people.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, students, hong, kong with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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