MamadjonovSamandar: The graph below shows four countries of residence of overseas students in Australia. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make make comparisons where relevant

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The graph below shows four countries of residence of overseas students in Australia. 

Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make make comparisons where relevant
The line graph illustrates four
countries
of residence of overseas
students
in Australia. There are four
contries
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countries
on the graph : Indonesia,
Hong
Kong
, Malaysia and Singapore.
Overall
, the number of
students
who lived in those
countries
generally increased from 1982 to 2000 and the amount of people who stayed in
Hong
Kong
was fluctuated
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during the given period. In 1982, no one lived in Indonesia,
Hong
Kong
and Singapore. Only less than 10,000
students
lived
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in Malaysia. But as time went by, the amount of
students
who came to
Austraila
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Australia
from those four
countries
gradually increased. In 1998,
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of Indonesian
students
was around 25,000, the highest record in
this
chart. Even though, the number of
Indonesian
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Indonesians
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dropped after 1998, at the end of the period, Indonesia was the top country among
of
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them. Singapore,
Hong
Kong
,
Malaysia
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and Malaysia
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were followed next but, these three
countries
'
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were similar,
recorded
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approximately 20,000 people.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 70%.
Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, students, hong, kong with synonyms.
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