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Some people think that living ịn big cities is bad for people's health. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Introduction
living in
abig
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a big
city
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 with all of facltieces could be
intresting
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interesting
 for
alot
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a lot
 of people ,
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 there are some people
whose
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who
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 don't prefer
lived
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to live
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 in crowded cities , In my opinion I love
the
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apply
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quite
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quiet
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 places but
in
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at
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same
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the same
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 time l
ilke
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like
 to get all
the
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the the
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 services in modern
city
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.
this
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 essay will discuss both view points .
Body · 1
first living in a big
city
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 could be a nice way for people to get
a
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apply
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good
works
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work
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 and
leved
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lived
besid
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beside
behind
 it ,
Morover
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Moreover
, to
found
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find
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 the services and
faclitices
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facilities
 they want ,
in stance
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instance
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, restaurants , parks ,
pool
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a pool
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, clubs
ang
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and
 gam sport,
Also
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, they can found
oporunities
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opportunities
 for doing anwe activities ,
for
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example
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 play with
foot ball
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football
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 team ..or
wporks
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works
work
 in new projects.
Body · 2
In
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On
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other
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the other
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 hand ,
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there
thre
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there
 are
agroup
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a group
 who like to sit in small
village
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villages
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 very far from the
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city
citiy
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city
 annoyance ,they
lives
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live
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 with simple tools because they think
this
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life
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styel
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style
 of
life
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 can
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protect
prodect
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protect
 them from diseases .
additionally
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 they
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breath
brith
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bring
a
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apply
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fresh air
contrast
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in contrast
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the
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to the
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poulltion
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population
position
 of the cars in the
cityies
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cities
 ,
furtheremore
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furthermore
 ,
Body · 3
the
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Physical
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psicology
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psychology
 health is
more
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apply
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better
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then
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than
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 individuals
they
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who
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 live in a big
city
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 they
dont
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don't
 each
others
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other
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Body · 4
oppisit
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opposite
opposit
 of them
the
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they
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 have strong
relationchips
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relationships
.
Conclusion
To
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In
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 conclusion, I
partically
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partially
particularly
 agree with the first group who prefer
loving
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living
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 in cities and I more with the second group
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who life
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life
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live
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styel
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style
to keep my mental
healtly
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health
healthy
 to complete my
life
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 .

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Include more relevant examples to support your arguments.
coherence cohesion
Focus on the logical flow of your ideas to improve readability.
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You have addressed both viewpoints.
coherence cohesion
Your essay attempts to cover a range of points related to the benefits and drawbacks of living in a big city.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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