Some people think that living ịn big cities is bad for people's health. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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a big

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with all of facltieces could be

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

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Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

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Some people think that living ịn big cities is bad for people's health. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Fully explain your ideas

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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.