The map displays the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

The map displays the development of the village of Ryemouth between 1995 and present. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.
The map shows the development of the Ryemouth countryside between 1995 and now.
Overall
, there are some changes by
added
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adding
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restaurant
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restaurants
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, tennis
park
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parks
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,
apartments
Correct word choice
and apartments
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,
also
Correct word choice
and also
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removed
Wrong verb form
removing
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fishing
port
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ports
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and fish
market
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markets
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. In 1995, the
farm land
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farmland
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was located at the corner of the Ryemouth village's map. But, in the
present
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present,
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the area was changed to be a golf area.
In addition
, the area
also
expanded.
By
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Of
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that, there is no more forest park and tennis court was added.
Furthermore
, the total
houses
Correct quantifier usage
number of houses
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were added too. Beforehand, there are 12 houses. Meanwhile, now
Correct pronoun usage
there is
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is
Correct subject-verb agreement
are
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more than 12 houses.
Moreover
, the shop was replaced with the restaurants.
Besides
, a car park was added precisely beside the hotel.
On
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In
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the south direction, in 1995 there
were
Correct subject-verb agreement
was
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fish
Correct article usage
a fish
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market, cafe, sea, and fishing port. Now,
cafe
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cafes
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and
sea
Correct article usage
the sea
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are still in their place.
However
, there is no fishing port anymore. The spot of
fish
Add an article
the fish
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market
also
changed
become
Fix the infinitive
to become
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apartments.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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