The diagram below shows the production of a lead pencil.

The picture below depicts the stages of producing machinery-made

pencil

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pencils

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, the process involves one main material (

a wood

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wood

a block of wood

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from trees), numerous stages (replanting, thinning, glueing, treating, hard pressing, heating, cutting) and some equipment (thinning machine, press-heater and cutter) Before being replanted in a special box filled with soil, it requires 4 months to grow from a tiny trunk to an increased sprout in terms of size and height.

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, in 3 years timeline, it gets thinned. After another 14 years, the fully-grown tree gets cut down. Pieces of trees that were cut, now are sliced to thin slats. Slats afterwards are treated and kept for almost 2 months. Beyond

60 days

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the 60-day

storage period, black lead is placed into the grooved and glued area of a

slat

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, the new

slat

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goes on top of the previous

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gets

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and gets

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hard pressed and heated simultaneously.

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, a cutter slices the

slat

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into individual pencils.

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, produced pencils are packed, being ready to be used by customers.

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Jul 15, 2024

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