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The diagram below shows the floor plan of public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The diagram below shows the floor plan of public library 20 years ago and how it looks now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
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The illustration shows the explanation of new features and layout changes in the current
library
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 floor plan. First and foremost, the planners propose to remove the tables and chairs from the middle of the
library
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.
This
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 will mean ballooning the amount of free space for
movement
Correct article usage
the movement
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 of customers.
Next,
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the user needs were installed namely, information desk, cafe,
self-service
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and self-service
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 machines.
Moreover
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, the only unchanged adult fiction book area was relocated to the back side of
new
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the new
a new
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 lecture room.
In addition
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 to
measures
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the measures
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 above,
Public
Correct article usage
the Public
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library
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got over
Verb problem
underwent
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 significant digitalization,
brand new
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and a brand-new
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 computer room was constructed for
this
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 purpose. In a nutshell, under these proposals, the needs of local residents will be better served by making Central
Library
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 a safer and more pleasant environment.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words library with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Floor plan
  • Public library
  • Layout
  • Bookshelves
  • Reading areas
  • Digitalization
  • Technological advancement
  • User needs
  • Space allocation
  • Facilities
  • Evolution
  • Community
  • Renovation
  • Adaptation
  • Accessibility
  • Multimedia
  • Archives
  • Reference section
  • Study carrels
  • Children's area
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