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The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports with four countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant

The line graph shows the percentages of Australian exports with four countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant
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The line graph demonstrates the proportion of exports made by Australia to
Japan
,
United
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states
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States
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 of America,
China
 and
India
 between 1990 and 2002.
Overall
, it can be concluded that
,
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Japan
, the major importer of Australian goods
initially
, was overtaken by
China
at the
end
 of the period. A minimised trade was reported with
India
all
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throughout the period. In the year 1990, about 1/4th of Australian products were exported to
Japan
whereas
United
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the United
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 States received just
a
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10%. A diminished trade was exhibited by both
the
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countries for a span of five years. After 1995
Japan
 continued the trend for the next five years and almost remained
in
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 a plateau at about 18%,
whereas
United
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 States was limited to just about 7% by the
end
 of the period.
On the other hand
, the other two countries, namely,
India
 and
China
 were not in the spotlight as they were traded to less than 5% in the year 1990, with
India
to be
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 the least. Indian imports from Australia remained in a plateau for a decade after which they were raised to above 5% but
finally
 managed to stay stable at 5% by the
end
 of the time.
In contrast
, the trade between Australia and
China
 was maximised over the course of time and about 30% of the Australian exports were to
this
 country by the
end
.
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