Some people think that governments should ban dangerous sports, while others think people should have freedom to do any sports or activity. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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It is argued that the government should discontinue harmful

sports

while

others believe it is a personal choice.

This

essay discusses the reasons why I agree with the idea of banning these types of

sports

and how damaging they can be. On the one hand, people who support the freedom of choice believe that players

engaged

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engage

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in dangerous

sports

practice regularly and become skilled at handling risks.

For example

, Formula 1 drivers are trained to drive at high speeds and know how to act in case of an accident,

such

as locating the nearest help point and freeing themselves from a damaged car.

Although

this

may be true for some

sports

, I still don't agree with allowing people to engage in

such

activities.

On the other hand

, those who believe harmful

sports

should be banned argue that these activities are life-threatening and can result in death or long-term injuries that are difficult to recover from.

Furthermore

, these health issues require extensive medical care, placing a heavy burden on the healthcare system.

For instance

, in some Arab countries, young men race at high speeds down main streets late at night.

As a result

, many who have accidents end up in hospitals for extended periods, receiving physical therapy to regain their normal lives. In conclusion,

although

some individuals believe that engaging in hazardous

sports

is a personal choice and they are aware of the risks, I and many others think that these

sports

should be banned by authorities

due to

their health threats and negative impact on the healthcare system.

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task response

Try to balance the points in favor and against the topic a bit more equally. Currently, the argument for banning dangerous sports is stronger and more detailed than the argument against it. Adding more depth to both sides will enhance your essay's balance.

coherence cohesion

Make sure that the ideas are consistently clear throughout the essay. Some sentences, like 'As a result, many who have accidents end up in hospitals for extended periods, receiving physical therapy to regain their normal lives,' could be rephrased for better clarity.

coherence cohesion

The essay presents a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion, making it easy to follow the arguments.

task response

The arguments are supported with relevant examples, such as those related to Formula 1 drivers and young men racing in Arab countries.

task response

The essay remains focused on the topic, clearly discussing both viewpoints and providing a personal opinion, which aligns well with the requirements of the task.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 7.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 8.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 7.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

258 words

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