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The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentage of the population in four Asian countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the data about the population from four Asian
countries
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, the
Philippines
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,
Malaysia
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, Thailand and
Indonesia
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, living in
cities
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 from the
year
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 1970 to 2020,
along with
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further
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 predictions for another 20 years, i.e., 2030 and 2040. Units are measured in percentage.
Overall
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, the
Philippines
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 had the highest number of population residing in
cities
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 in the initial
year
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 of 1970,
whereas
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,
Indonesia
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 had the lowest number of
people
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 living in
cities
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.
Also
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, the data of
people
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 from
Malaysia
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 living in
cities
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 was almost similar to the
Philipinnes
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Philippines
. The data from the
year
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 1970 to 1980 indicates two
countries
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,
Malaysia
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 and the
Philippines
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 to be the highest in terms of 30%
people
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 living in
cities
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,
while
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 Thailand and
Indonesia
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 had about 15% and 18%
people
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 occupying the
cities
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. From the beginning of the
year
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 1990 there was a drastic rise in
Malaysia
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, more than 45% of the population occupied the
cities
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 which was the highest among all four
countries
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,
however
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 a small fall in percentage was noted in the
Philippines
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 in the same
year
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. The predictions for the next 20 years regarding
people
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 living in
cities
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 (2030 and 2040) were marked with a rise of approximately 35% and 40% in
Indonesia
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,
moreover
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, no down trend is allocated to any of the
countries
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.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 79%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words countries, philippines, malaysia, indonesia, cities, year, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • percentage
  • population
  • cities
  • Asian countries
  • 1970
  • 2020
  • predictions
  • 2030
  • 2040
  • estimations
  • urban
  • increasing
  • steadily
  • Japan
  • China
  • rise
  • urbanization
  • South Korea
  • India
  • upward trend
  • slow pace
  • surpass
  • resided
  • projected
  • moderate increase
  • significant surge
  • exceed
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