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Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships people make? Has this become a positive or negative development?

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There is no denying the fact that in the
last
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 century
technology
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 has affected
people
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's lives in massive ways.
This
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 essay will discuss how the types of
relationships
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 between humans are affected by
technology
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as well as
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 the positive development that it has.
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 with, there are many ways that the new innovation has influenced our lives.
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,
this
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 innovation has helped numerous
people
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 to have a variety of types of
relationships
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.
In other words
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,
people
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 from different cultures and societies can make friendships,
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 they may be from different generations and backgrounds.
In addition
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, new platforms, which have been developed because of
technology
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such
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 as social media, are encouraging
people
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 to make a friend and even a business partner by using them.
For example
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, in the past
people
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 had limits and could not make any kind of relations with others who did not live in the same region because it was hard to communicate and that was impossible. In terms of the development that
technology
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 has, it has a significant effect on human life and it has become a crucial aspect which we could not live without. It is
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 possible to say that the Internet, which is considered a type of
technology
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, has made the whole world as if they live in a small village which makes the relations stronger than ever.
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, one of the positive impacts is that communication has become easier and you can communicate with whoever you want at any time regardless of where you live.
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, parents who have children who live abroad will not be worried about them because they can talk to them by call or video. In conclusion, there are many ways that
technology
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 has influenced our lives and it has made us have a variety of
relationships
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 from all over the world. It is
also
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 true that it has several positive developments
such
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 as the strengthening of
relationships
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 and making communications easier.
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