Some people believe that traveling is a valuable experience; others say it is a waste of time and money. Discuss both views and give your own opinion
Although
some people believe that visiting other countries has a positive effacts
on the soul and body others prefer saving money and time rather than spending them on Correct your spelling
effect
effects
travel
.However
, this
essay will discuss the benefits of having a new experience from other countries in the world
and how travilling
changes the brain and the way people think by learning about other cultures.
Correct your spelling
travelling
Firstly
, one of the best ways to discover the world
is by travel
and gaining new experiences,going to another country like Egypt or India opens a new window in history, for example
, Egypt has places built a thousand years ago by the slaves who built the pyramids of Giza,also
there is the Islamic castles and mosques from the golden age of Islam.Furthermore
,besides
the historical places
visitors can have fun and relax at night parties which is very popular in Egypt.Add a comma
places,
However
, individuals should at least travel
once in their lives to experience and see the past and present of the world
and gain a wider vision for the future.
In addition
to the above points, folks can learn about other cultures and their tradition, beside
tasting different types of food like Asian dishes or Italian food.Replace the word
besides
Moreover
, people who travel
a lot have an open mind which helps them to = understand about
the Change preposition
apply
world
and build relationships easily.For instance
, one of my friends every year goes to a different city in Europe which helps her to learn English
language like a native and have a job in a global company. there are a lot of things can Change the article
the English
gets
from learning about other nation and their tradition which Change the verb form
get
is
worth spending money and time.
In conclusion, I believe Correct subject-verb agreement
are
traveling
is the best method to enjoy and relax on holidays and discover the Change the spelling
travelling
world
, which allows the brain to see life in other aspectsSubmitted by mariaalshrife on
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