The bar chart shows the types of media that people of different age groups used to get daily news in one country in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The bar chart shows the types of media that people of different age groups used to get daily news in one country in 2011. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart gives information about the percentage of the media sources used by several
groups
of age to get everyday
news
in an unnamed nation in 2011.
Overall
, social networks were widely used only in a group of minors aged between 10 and 17,
while
others
prefered
Correct your spelling
preferred
to get
news
mainly from the radio. Looking into details, social networks made
nearly
Change preposition
up nearly
show examples
80% of media in relatively younger
groups
aged 10-17 and 18-29 years.
Whereas
, the trend of using social networks as a
news
source
was tend
Wrong verb form
tends
show examples
to decrease as people get older. In terms of
micro blogging
Add a hyphen
micro-blogging
show examples
, approximately one-fifth of people aged 18-29 used it to get
an information
Remove the article
information
a piece of information
show examples
, which is the highest percentage among other
groups
. Radio was the most popular media that people used to receive
news
making around 90% of all
groups
, except the group of 10-17 years. The group of children aged 10-17 years used
radio
Correct article usage
the radio
show examples
as twice less
than
Change preposition
as
show examples
middle-aged
groups
, which was around 40%.
Submitted by sb.angar2011 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words groups, news with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "information" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
What to do next:
Look at other essays: