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The pie charts show the main reasons for migration to and from the UK in 2007

The pie charts show the main reasons for migration to and from the UK in 2007
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The pie charts
illustrates
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 various factors that lead
people
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 to either emigrate or migrate to the
UK
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 in 2007.
Overall
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, it can be observed that formal study, jobs, joining someone and work are the prominent factors for
people
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 to migrate to the
UK
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,
likewise
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, emigration has the same motives, but many stated no apparent causes for it.
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 30% of
people
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 relocated to the
UK
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 in search of corporate jobs
while
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 29% of
people
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 shifted
to
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overseas in search of permanent jobs. Roughly one-quarter of
people
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 applying for higher education in the
UK
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, soaring up to 26%
comapred
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compared
 to 4% of
british
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British
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 nationals left the
UK
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 to pursue education. Nearly 22% of British citizens eyed foreign countries for business ventures in comparison to only 12% of investors
were
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who were
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 keen to invest in
the
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apply
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Britain. Many individuals accompanied partners with them when they travelled to and from Britain, nearly 15% of
people
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 immigrated with companions as opposed to only 13% of them migrated with their associates.
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, 18% of
people
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 did not state their motives for emigration and
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 6% of immigrants didn't state their reasons as well.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, uk with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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