The pie charts show the main reasons for migration to and from the UK in 2007

The pie charts show the main reasons for migration to and from the UK in 2007
The pie charts
illustrates
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various factors that lead
people
to either emigrate or migrate to the
UK
in 2007.
Overall
, it can be observed that formal study, jobs, joining someone and work are the prominent factors for
people
to migrate to the
UK
,
likewise
, emigration has the same motives, but many stated no apparent causes for it.
It is clear that
30% of
people
relocated to the
UK
in search of corporate jobs
while
29% of
people
shifted
to
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overseas in search of permanent jobs. Roughly one-quarter of
people
applying for higher education in the
UK
, soaring up to 26%
comapred
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compared
to 4% of
british
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nationals left the
UK
to pursue education. Nearly 22% of British citizens eyed foreign countries for business ventures in comparison to only 12% of investors
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keen to invest in
the
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Britain. Many individuals accompanied partners with them when they travelled to and from Britain, nearly 15% of
people
immigrated with companions as opposed to only 13% of them migrated with their associates.
Furthermore
, 18% of
people
did not state their motives for emigration and
also
6% of immigrants didn't state their reasons as well.
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