The table below shows how patients evaluated different services at three health centres.

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patients

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ratings of various medical facilities in

Longston

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Centre

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Peveril

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Centre

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, and

Marchbank

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Centre

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, it can be observed that

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excels in providing

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health services

while

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Peveril

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Centre

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trails behind at

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stop and

Longston

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Centre

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is the

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. When it comes to booking appointments, the patients gave approval points of 5.2, 9.1, and 7.8 for

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Peveril

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Centre

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and

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Centre

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respectively. Both

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and

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Centre

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receive above 7 when it comes to child care but

Longston

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remains slightly below at 6.3. The

Peveril

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asserts complete

dominace

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dominance

with respect to public support score, soaring up to 9.6, the highest compared to

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peers, where

Longston

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centre

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remains the lowest at 4.3

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Marchbank

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6.5.

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the

Longston

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Centre

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fails to compete effectively in almost all the health domains,

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the

performace

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performance

of doctors here remains satisfactory,

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lower than

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competitors, scoring 8 points is

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considerable achievement.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "although, while".

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Vocabulary: Replace the words longston, centre, peveril, marchbank with synonyms.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.

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Vocabulary: The word "remains" was used 3 times.

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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
4
Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 7.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Introduction & conclusion present

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 9.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

161 words

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The table below shows how patients evaluated different services at three health centres.

Some people think that newspapers are the best way to get news. However, others believe that other media are better sources of news. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Complain to the manager of a hotel about service quality.

Write a letter to the cinema manager to inform him or her that you have lost your bag in the cinema. In your letter, you should: Tell exactly what happened and when Explain where you think you left the bag Ask the manager to help find your bag

Art classes, like painting and drawing, are not as important as other subjects, so some people think that it should not be a compulsory subject at high school. To what extent do you agree or disagree?