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This diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summaries the information by selectiong and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

This diagram below shows how electricity is generated in a hydroelectric power station. Summaries the information by selectiong and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The picture
illaustrates
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illustrates
 the
process
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 of generation of electricity in a hydroelectric
power
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station
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.
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, it can be concluded that
,
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 the
power
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 extraction
process
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 takes place at day
times
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whereas
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 at night
times
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 the
water
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 used from a high-level
reservoird
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reservoir
reservoirs
 is restored. As the name hydroelectric
power
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station
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 indicates,
water
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 serves to be the main source
for
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 the
power
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 supply. The
power
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station
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 gets the required
water
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 supply from a high-level
reservoir
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such
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 as a river, through its dam which allows the
water
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 intake only at day
times
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 as it remains closed during the nights. The
water
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 enters the
power
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statio
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station
,where it is processed to obtain the
power
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 through
generator
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a generator
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 which is operated by the reversible turbines. The current so synthesised, is allowed to pass through the
power
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 lines and supplied to the national grid. The excess
water
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 is made a way to join the low-level
reservoir
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, which is located next to the generation plant.
This
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 entire
process
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 takes place only at
day
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daytime
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times
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. As mentioned,
the
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 electricity generation is halted at night.
However
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, the nights are not set free. They witness the
process
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 of restoring the
water
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 level in the high-level
reservoir
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. The excess
water
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 which is transferred into the low-level
reservoir
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 is pumped back to its origin through the reversible turbines in the
power
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station
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 to maintain the
water
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 level.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words process, power, station, times, water, reservoir with synonyms.
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