The bar chart below shows the estimated sales of Jeans for two companies next year in Turkey.The pie chart shows the projected market share of the two companies in Jeans at the end of next year.

The bar chart below shows the estimated sales of Jeans for two companies next year in Turkey.The pie chart shows the projected market share of the two companies in Jeans at the end of next year.
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The bar chart illustrates the prediction of Jean's seals for two
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next year in Turkey ,
while
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the pie graph displays the stake of projected business happening by the end of next year for the same group.
Overall
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it is clear that
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Jack and
Jones
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will be selling triple the number of
mango
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pairs of Jeans profit-making by January. In July, both
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will have nearly the same number of profits. A notable estimation is that 50% of the market share will be for other
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. It can be seen in the bar graph that Jack and
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will excel in
Mango
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financial , reaching around 450 thousand economic for pairs of Jeans , where mangoes will be selling close to 100 thousand . By February both company's wholesale will decline and start to gradually increase. In July,
mango
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sales will rocket and reach 500 , July is the only month where
Mango
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monetary will top Jack and
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. Moving to the pie graph , other businesses will be taking 50% of the market share , leaving the other half for
Mango
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and Jack and
Jones
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.
Mango
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will take on only 20% of the share
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Jack and
Jones
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will take on the rest which is 30% .
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Vocabulary: Replace the words jones, mango with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "graph" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • estimated sales
  • projected market share
  • dominant player
  • competition
  • consumer choice
  • pricing strategies
  • market trends
  • marketing campaigns
  • economic conditions
  • fashion trends
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