Some people choose to eat no meat or fish. They believe that this is not only better for their own health but also benefits the environment as a whole. Discuss this view and give your own opinion.

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meat
or
fish
is the most popular trend in the decade. There are some who believe that it helps for being healthy and saving environment resources, whilst others disagree and argue that
meat
or
fish
is the best energy for
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. In
this
essay, I will discuss both
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, and
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will conclude with my opinion. On one hand, several
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has
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increased in contemporary society
due to
people
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to eat
some
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food
that
giving
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highly
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energy.
Meat
of
fish
become the industrial
food
.
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, sickness has
appared
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appeared
for
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people
who
usual
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recieving
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receive
the
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chemicals
form
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that
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industrial
food
, especially
meat
and
fish
.
For example
, in the USA, 50% of
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people
like to eat
burger
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around once per week. It is undeniable that
people
become
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and
unhealty
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unhealthy
.
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,
they
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are
also
many
people
who place more value on the
evironment
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environment
which
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choosing
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eat
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no
meat
or
fish
. there are many
option
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to eat without
meat
or
fish
.
For instance
, vegan
people
do not have
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form
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from
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chemicals
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food
and
also
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the global environment.
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grammar
Working on grammar and spelling can significantly improve the readability of your essay. For example, 'Eating on meat or fish' should be 'Eating no meat or fish'.
examples
Make sure to support your arguments with more detailed and relevant examples. Including real statistics or studies can strengthen your points.
structure
Structure the essay clearly with a proper introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. This helps the reader follow your arguments more easily.
task achievement
You have attempted to cover both perspectives on the issue and provided some reasoning for each.
coherence
Your essay remains focused on the main topic and does not stray from it.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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