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As a results of tourism and the increasing number of people travelling, there is an growing demand for more flights.what problems does this haveon the environment?what measures could be taken to slove the problem?

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As you know, tourism is a significant sector in many countries so, the demand
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increasing
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effect
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affects
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enviroment
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environment
. In
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discuss
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 problem.
firstly
, some
pople
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people
 are keen to travel and visit different places for
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various
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reasons
. some time they go
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 to study,
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 or even to
entertirment
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entertain
. so they use flights and that may damage the environment and cause
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pollution
. To avoid
this
 problem or limit it we should less from
travle
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travel
. In
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conclusion
, tourism has
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a lot
 of
benfities
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benefits
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backward
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also
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task achievement
Ensure you address all parts of the task. Include both problems caused by increased flights and multiple measures that could be taken.
task achievement
Develop your main points clearly and provide supporting details or examples for each point.
coherence cohesion
Improve your logical structure by ensuring that each paragraph has a clear main idea and flows smoothly into the next.
coherence cohesion
Enhance cohesion by using a range of linking words/phrases to connect ideas and sentences more effectively.
coherence cohesion
Expand your introduction and conclusion to briefly summarize the main points you will discuss/have discussed.
task achievement
Your essay is focused on an important and relevant topic.
coherence cohesion
Both the introduction and the conclusion provide a clear framework for your discussion.

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