he two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities. The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.

he two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.

The two maps below show an island, before and after the construction of some tourist facilities.
The two images present the transformation of an
island
which has been developed for tourism. The
island
was previously
original
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without any facilities for people to live on
it
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.
However
, a number of facilities have been constructed to attract more visitors.
For example
, there is a big reception built( building?) in the middle, connected to a restaurant to the north by a vehicle track.
Besides
, about 15 accommodation huts have been settled in the east and west of the reception area for
travelers
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travellers
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to take a rest, linked with each other by footpaths. These footpaths
also
lead to other two main developed areas. The first is a pier built on the south coast, which is convenient for guests to enjoy boat-based recreational activities. The other is a swimming zone next to the beach on the western tip, which can
also
diverse
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the activities of the
island
for tourists. In conclusion,
this
island
has been renovated
a
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with a
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variety of facilities to cater for travelers’ tourism demands
such
as swimming, dining, boating and eating.
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  • island
  • before and after
  • construction
  • tourist facilities
  • maps
  • changes
  • comparison
  • description
  • implications
  • personal opinion
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