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The charts below give information about USA marriage and divorce rates between 1970 and 2000. andthe martial status of adult Americans in two of the years

The charts below give information about USA marriage and divorce rates between 1970 and 2000. andthe martial status of adult Americans in two of the years
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The bar chart depicts marriage and
divorce
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rates
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 in the USA for the years 1970, 1980, 1990 and 2000.
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 is accompanied by
an
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another bar chart illustrating
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percentage
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the percentage
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 of American
adults
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 who were married, never married, widowed and divorced in the years 1970 and 2000. As
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can be seen from the bar chart, in the year 1970 there were 2.5
million
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 marriages and 1
million
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 divorced
people
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 in the USA. In the next decade,
total
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a total
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 number of married
people
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 remained the same as in the previous decade,
however
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, the
divorce
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rates
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were
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increased by 0.4
million
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 compared to 1970. In the year 1990, marriages decreased in number by 0.25
million
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 in comparison to
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last
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the last
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 two consecutive decades,
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,
divorce
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rates
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also
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 dropped down to just above 1
million
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 as compared to 1.4
millions
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 in 1980. In 2000, there were 2
million
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 married and 1
million
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 divorced
people
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 in the USA In 1970, 70% of
adults
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 were married, 12% of the total
adults
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,
never
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were never
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 married and 5% of widowed
adults
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 were present and
very
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a very
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 negligible
percentage
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 of
adults
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 were divorced.
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 in 2000,
married
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the married
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 population dipped by 10%
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, 20% of
adults
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 never married and nearly 20% of divorced in 2000 as compared to the year 1970.
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,
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percentage
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the percentage
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 of married
people
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 decreased since 1970 and
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percentage
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the percentage
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 of unmarried increased by the 20th century.
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,
divorce
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rates
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 remained fairly stable for the period in question.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words divorce, rates, percentage, adults, million, people with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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