The charts below give information about USA marriage and divorce rates between 1970 and 2000. andthe martial status of adult Americans in two of the years

The charts below give information about USA marriage and divorce rates between 1970 and 2000. andthe martial status of adult Americans in two of the years
The bar chart depicts marriage and
divorce
rates
in the USA for the years 1970, 1980, 1990 and 2000.
This
is accompanied by
an
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another bar chart illustrating
percentage
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the percentage
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of American
adults
who were married, never married, widowed and divorced in the years 1970 and 2000. As
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can be seen from the bar chart, in the year 1970 there were 2.5
million
marriages and 1
million
divorced
people
in the USA. In the next decade,
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number of married
people
remained the same as in the previous decade,
however
, the
divorce
rates
were
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increased by 0.4
million
compared to 1970. In the year 1990, marriages decreased in number by 0.25
million
in comparison to
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two consecutive decades,
likewise
,
divorce
rates
also
dropped down to just above 1
million
as compared to 1.4
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in 1980. In 2000, there were 2
million
married and 1
million
divorced
people
in the USA In 1970, 70% of
adults
were married, 12% of the total
adults
,
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married and 5% of widowed
adults
were present and
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negligible
percentage
of
adults
were divorced.
On the other hand
in 2000,
married
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population dipped by 10%
in addition
, 20% of
adults
never married and nearly 20% of divorced in 2000 as compared to the year 1970.
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,
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the percentage
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of married
people
decreased since 1970 and
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the percentage
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of unmarried increased by the 20th century.
However
,
divorce
rates
remained fairly stable for the period in question.
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