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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The graph below shows average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Sweden, Italy, and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant. Write at least 150 words.
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The line graph illustrates the average carbon dioxide
emissions
 per person in four nations (
UK
, Sweden, Italy, Portugal) which were produced over 40 years from 1967 to 2007.
Overall
, the CO2
emissions
 in
UK
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the UK
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 and Sweden went down,
while
 in Italy and Portugal, they went up.
Moreover
,
UK
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the UK
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 had the highest CO2
emissions
 over the given period. With regards to the amount of
of
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CO2
emissions
 in the
UK
, it began at around 11 metric
tonnes
 and
then
it
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dropped to 9 metric
tonnes
 in 2007.
Similary
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Similarly
, in Sweden, the figure started at 9 metric
tonnes
 after which it peaked at 11 metric
tonnes
 before falling rapidly
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to
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nearly 5
tonnes
 in the final year.
On the other hand
, CO2
emissions
 in Italy started to
rose
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rise
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, originally there were about 4 metric
tonnes
 which reached just below 7 metric
tonnes
 in 2007.
Also
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Also,
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 Portugal speedily hit the peak from roughly 1 to 5 metric
tonnes
 in
final
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its final
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 years.
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