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Sports play a significant role in promoting physical and mental well-being. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#sports #role
Some people argue that
sports
 play an essential role in promoting physical and mental well-being.
While
 people can be damaged by doing these
sports
, their physical and mental
health
 can be improved. Staying
health
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 methods
such
 as doing
sports
 can hurt
individuls
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individuals
while
 they are playing these
sports
. Let's take boxing as an example. When
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a
the
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person who is training with his partner can take a hit by misunderstanding.
In
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this
 time that player must have medical treatment because of having a hit.
This
 situation,
however
, can have some good effects. In
this
 time
sports man
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sportsman
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 tries to learn how to give that hit back. It drives
to
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me to
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 do more
trainings
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training
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 than before.
This
 means that
this
 man's physical
health
 can be improved by doing more training.
Additionally
, every sport has competitions
which
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sports men
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sportsmen
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 can compete
each
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with each
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 other. In
this
 time somebody wins and can have motivation through
this
 event. It means that mental well-being can be improved by doing sport. In conclusion, despite the concern
of
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about
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 doing
sports
, these
sports
 are largely necessary as they can improve individuals' mental and physical
health
.
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Try to provide more detailed and well-organized examples to support your points. This can help illustrate your argument more effectively.
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Ensure each paragraph has a clear main idea and that all points within a paragraph are cohesively connected.
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You have a clear stance on the topic and provide reasoning to support your argument.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • physical well-being
  • mental well-being
  • regular exercise
  • chronic diseases
  • weight management
  • endorphins
  • depression
  • anxiety
  • stress
  • team sports
  • social skills
  • friendships
  • teamwork
  • life skills
  • discipline
  • time management
  • perseverance
  • cognitive function
  • concentration
  • academic performance
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