Some people believe that we succeed in sports due to our in born talent, others argue that continuous working on one self is a key to success. What do you think
Successful people
those
we admire Add a missing verb
are those
to
their skills some people Change preposition
for
seen
they are talented on Wrong verb form
see
other
hand they think by working hard in Correct article usage
the other
these
essay I will explain Correct determiner usage
this
these different opinion
. Change the determiner
this different opinion
these different opinions
Firstly
, when we see new
born maybe Correct word choice
apply
you
observe some traits before Correct pronoun usage
we
even
Correct pronoun usage
they even
them
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apply
talks
, so we must not neglect Correct subject-verb agreement
talk
this
aspect. In addition
, scientists says
children acquire some characteristics from their father and mother from genes. Change the verb form
say
Secondly
, people need focus
on improving their skills by Fix the infinitive
to focus
practicing
and working on Change the spelling
practising
it
to Correct pronoun usage
them
sharp
Replace the word
sharpen
these skill
. Change the determiner
this skill
these skills
Finally
, in my opinion, if we have hidden talents we have to figure it out by asking our family and friends those
we meet them Correct pronoun usage
apply
everyday
and when we know more about Replace the word
every day
our self
we must Correct your spelling
ourselves
to
work more to improve these skills.Change the verb form
apply
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coherence cohesion
The essay needs a clearer structure to enhance coherence and cohesion. Start with an introduction that restates the topic and outlines the main points. Separate each point into different paragraphs to improve readability.
task achievement
Make sure to consistently support your points with examples. This strengthens your argument and provides evidence for your claims.
task achievement
The essay addresses the topic by discussing both inherited talent and hard work. This demonstrates an understanding of the prompt.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite