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The bar chart below shows the hours per week that teenagers spend doing certain activities in Chester from 2002 to 2007.

The bar chart below shows the hours per week that teenagers spend doing certain activities in Chester from 2002 to 2007.
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The bar chart demonstrates the number of
hours
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 spent by young adults in Chester on various activities between 2002 and 2007.
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, it can be seen that every year, teenagers spend the most time watching television and the least time playing bowling. The amount of time spent watching television increased steadily from 2002 to 2007. In 2002 and 2003, 25
hours
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 every week were spent watching television. By 2004,
this
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 figure had increased by 5
hours
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. The number of
hours
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 rose to around 35 and 37 in 2005 and 2006, respectively.
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, there was a marginal increase in the following year to around 38
hours
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, making it the highest figure on the chart. For bowling, the total
hours
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 dedicated fluctuated between 2002 and 2007, but every year it was less than 5
hours
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. In 2002, the number of
hours
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 stood at around 4.5 weekly, but
then
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 there was a downward trend until 2004. There was a slight rise in 2005, but from
then
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 on, the trend was generally decreasing.

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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words hours with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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