You should spend no more than 20 minutes on this task. This line graph shows the percentage of women who were employed in four countries from 1985 to 2005. Write a report for a university lecturer describing the information. You should write at least 150 words. а
This
line graph illustrates the amount of females in four governments, who were
hired from 1985 till
2005. Units are Change preposition
to
mesured
in percentage.
Correct your spelling
measured
Overall
, it can clearly be seen that in two countries were gradually increasing over the given period
. However
, the USA was
significantly Verb problem
apply
fall
Wrong verb form
fell
last
five years, from 2000 to 2005. Also
at the start of period
, France quickly decreased Add an article
the period
a period
for
10 Change preposition
by
percent
. With regards to amount of Afganistan’s working ladies, from 1985 it beganChange the spelling
per cent
Fix the infinitive
to
Furthermore
, the demand of
working females dramatically came to 0Change preposition
for
Change the spelling
per cent
percent
.Likewise
, french women employing
at first went down significantly Wrong verb form
employed
for
10Change preposition
to
Change the spelling
per cent
percent
, but after 1990 considerable
rose to almost Change the word
considerably
fifty
Correct your spelling
50
percent
.
In 1985 the highest percentage of employed was the USA and it was Change the spelling
per cent
nuchanged
for over Correct your spelling
unchanged
period
shown. As like Korea, it was on
Change preposition
in
the
third place and still had it. Correct article usage
apply
However
,
for over this
period
of gradually increasing, there was
some downs too. It was reached a
peak in 2000, after started falling. Korea had really good stability Change the verb form
were
of
making upwardChange preposition
in
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
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Basic structure: Use less body paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words period, percent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "gradually" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fifth paragraph.
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