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The pie chart below shows the highest level of education achieved by people over age 21 in two different countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie chart below shows the highest level of education achieved by people over age 21 in two different countries. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The pie charts illustrate the achievement of the highest
education
 level among
people
 over 21 years old from two different
countries
.
Overall
, most
people
 completed secondary learning in both
countries
 and the second majority of highest study achieved by them at vocational and technical schools. The significant difference between these two
countries
 is
on
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in
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 university degrees.
Country
 A has 45% of
people
 finished their studies at
secondary
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the secondary
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 institute, which is the dominant percentage of highest
education
 achievement, with 30% graduating in the vocational and technology school in the second proportion.
Similarly
, the majority
for
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of
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people
 from
country
 B
complete
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completed
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 their highest
education
is
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in
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 secondary
education
and
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apply
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followed by
the
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a
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 degree in vocational and technology faculty with 35% and 30%, respectively. There are only 5% of students do not attend
institution
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institutions
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 in both
countries
. 5% of university
education
achieved
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was achieved
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 by students from
country
 A
while
 25%
people
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of people
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 from
country
 B completed that degree.
However
,
country
 A has
15
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a 15
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%
of
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apply
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primary school graduation rate, which is 10% more than
country
 B.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words education, people, countries, country with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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