The best way to teach children to coperate is through team sports at school. To what extent do you agree or disagree
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teamwork
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skills
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hardiness
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interact
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task achievement
Your essay generally responds to the task and presents a clear position. However, some of your ideas could be more clearly expressed and supported with more detailed examples. For instance, when discussing trust and teamwork, specific examples of how these are built through team sports could strengthen your argument.
coherence cohesion
Ensure that all paragraphs are logically sequenced and that each idea smoothly transitions to the next. Some sentences were slightly disjointed, affecting the overall flow of your arguments. Reviewing the use of transitional phrases will improve this.
coherence cohesion
It's important to proofread your writing for minor errors in spelling, grammar, and word choice. Errors like 'chelidren-self' instead of 'children themselves', 'conallation' instead of 'consolation', and 'schoole' instead of 'school' can detract from the readability of the essay.
coherence cohesion
You have a clear introduction and a well-defined conclusion, which help frame your argument effectively.
task achievement
The main points you raise about trust building and teamwork development through team sports are relevant and substantial.
Word Count
IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.
A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.
Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.