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The chart below shows the percentage of the total US population aged 65 and over between 1900 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the percentage of the total US population aged 65 and over between 1900 and 2000. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The chart represents the percentage of the total number of people living in the US aged 65 and above from 1900 to 2000.
Overall
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, there was a general
increase
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 in the US
population
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 throughout the period. The
population
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 was the largest in 1990,
whereas
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 in 1900, the
population
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 was the lowest.
Moreover
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, a section of the
population
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 aged 65 and 74 was higher compared to the other
age
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 groups .In 2000, the
age
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 group from 75 to 85 and above was the largest, and In 1990, the
age
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 group from 65 - 74 experienced its largest
increase
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 despite the decrease in 2000. The
age
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 group of 85 and above had a consistent
increase
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 in
population
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 by 0.2 per
cent
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 in the period from 1900 to 1930, and in 1990, when it increased by 0.2, the
population
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 was the largest.
Furthermore
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, the
age
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 groups from 75 to 85 and above had the largest
increase
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 in percentage in the year 2000 with 1.5 and 4.4 per
cent
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, respectively. Those who were aged 65 and 74 remained at 6.1 per
cent
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 from 1960 to 1970
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 and experienced its largest
increase
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 in 1990 with 7.3 per
cent
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.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words increase, population, age, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 6 times.
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