You have been working for a company for some time, and other rival companies are willing to employ you with a higher salary for all the practical experience you have gained. Write a letter to your company manager and in your letter • Explain the situation • Say what you would like the manager to do (increase the salary etc.) • Say what action you would take in case the manager fails to meet your demands Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses.

Hello Mark, hope
this
letter finds you well. First of all, I would like to iterate how much I am enjoying working with you and
this
company
.
However
, I have been approached by another
company
Polestar
and
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to join them as
Engineering
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an Engineering
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Manager. They are willing to provide me with a salary of 70,000 GBP per annum, which will be an increment of 20%. Not only that, they will be providing me with a
company
car
together with
other benefits. But most importantly, they will put me in charge and manage a team of 30 engineers designing
next generation
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EV vehicles. My reason for
this
letter is to seek
for
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a
payrise
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of 20% so it matches the offer I'm getting, as I ideally would like to stay and continue working with you. With my 10 years of experience, I really hope
this
is something you can really consider. Unfortunately, if
this
is not possible, I will be left with no choice but to leave and join the new
company
. Thank you for your consideration.
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coherence cohesion
Consider separating the paragraph into two, with one focusing on the offer you received and the other on your request and intentions.
task achievement
Be sure to clearly specify what position and compensation you are aiming for if the salary is to be increased, to make your letter more persuasive.
coherence cohesion
The letter is clear and well-organized, with a polite opening and closing, which enhances readability.
task achievement
The writer has clearly outlined the situation, the offer received, and the desired outcome in terms of a pay increase, demonstrating a strong understanding of the task.

The Closing

The style of the letter determine how you have to close it.

Check out the suggested closing sentences for each type of letter in the General IELTS Test. The closing sentence should be the last sentence of your letter.

Formal style (To someone you have not met, whose name you don’t know)

  • Yours faithfully,

Semi-formal (To someone you may or may not have met, whose last name you know)

  • Yours sincerely,

Informal (To someone you know well, whose first name you know and use)

  • Best regards,
  • Warm wishes,

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