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It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instance for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss hoth these views and give your own opinion.

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Some believe that people get talent inherently
while
 others argue that it can be instilled by certain practices for a specific period of
times
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.
As well
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 said that "
practice
 makes a man perfect" and I strongly agree with
this
 statement rather than it has been a congenital.In
this
 essay,I will discuss both sides with
an
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appropriate examples. On the one hand,it has been proved that kids get numerous things in inheritance
such
 as similar appearance,skin tone and some habits.
Moreover
,some child has
same
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 significant qualities
of
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 their parents like
same
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the same
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 passion for dance,singing and
business
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 field.For
this
,they do not have to
practice
 as much as they get from their ancestors.
For example
,some kids are extremely
intelligents
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intelligent
 in
couting
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counting
coating
scouting
 and calibrating things and it would be only possible by gratifications of congenital legacies.
On the other hand
,people argue that it can be possible by
practice
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 a task on a regular basis.Some skills only need regular training
otherwise
 it can not be possible without performing it in routine.
For instance
,
plethora
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institutes
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of institutes
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 are providing numerous skill booster training programs like sports academies,language programs ,swimming classes and music courses,without
it
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them
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 there would not be any chances to get prominent personalities for a nation.Not everyone gets these in their legacies,it is a
ramifications
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 of
an
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their
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 extreme practices
of
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them
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To sum up
,
while
 arguing these controversies it will be considered that they can get some similarities from their ancients but
practice
 is the key to success and one can become a veteran in
the
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 particular field by learning it through
practice
.
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Both viewpoints are discussed, providing a balanced analysis of the topic.
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